[口译点滴]之二

在这月明中秋的良宵
On this splendid moonlit night in mid autumn

我代表中国政府和人民
I am on behalf of the Chinese Government and people
let me, on behalf of the Chinese Government and people

时代华纳集团举办的“'99《财富》全球论坛”
'99 Fortune Global Forum, which is sponsored by Time Warner
Group Inc.

表示热烈的欢迎。（译法上期有介绍过哟~）
extend a warm welcome to...


试着翻译下面这一小句话，积极参与者有考元（15）<凡是认真翻译者皆奖>及积分（5）<认真总结个人思路者奖积分>奖励~本奖励持续一周有效<分开发放>，活动可长期参与~[s:2]

在这月明中秋的良宵，我们在东海之滨的上海欢聚一堂，我代表中国政府和人民，向前来参加时代华纳集团举办的“'99《财富》全球论坛”活动的朋友们，表示热烈的欢迎。
On this splendid moonlit night in mid autumn, as we gather in the beautiful city of Shanghai, located on the coast of the East China Sea, let me, on behalf of the Chinese Government and people, extend a warm welcome to the friends who have come to take part in the '99 Fortune Global Forum, which is sponsored by Time Warner Group Inc.

另注：标准译文中划线部分则是翻译中需要注意之处，个人感觉这句话虽短小但表达上字字珠玑，很是经典~敬请各位译友分享~且请在翻译出来并校对标准译文后，给出自己的翻译心得及修改总结，以便进一步提高~谢谢参与

[ 本帖最后由 静听花开 于 2007-4-30 10:31 AM 编辑 ]

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在这月明中秋的良宵，我们在东海之滨的上海欢聚一堂，我代表中国政府和人民，向前来参加时代华纳集团举办的“\'99《财富》全球论坛”活动的朋友们，表示热烈的欢迎。

On this splendid moonlit night in mid autumn.We get together at the east seashore of shanghai.Let me, on behalf of the Chinese Government and people,extend a warm welcome to companions who take part in the \'99 Fortune Global Forum, which is sponsored by Time Warner Group Inc.

我英文很瞥,大家多多指教!谢谢!

偶首先要声明一点:在翻译之前,偶看了前辈们的心得体会,所以才用上了on the coast of 和who have come to take part in ,其实我也没有想到会用这种表达方法，我需要记下来，以备后用！

关于上海的修饰语the beautiful city 偶是一点也没有想到，因为原文中根本就没有说＂美丽的城市上海＂，这一点也是值得偶学习的！

＂东海之滨＂中的＂东海＂我译为eastern ocean ,翻译的过大了！看了答案才知道是中国的东海the East China Sea,需要记住啊!

在这月明中秋的良宵，我们在东海之滨的上海欢聚一堂，我代表中国政府和人民，向前来参加时代华纳集团举办的“\'99《财富》全球论坛”活动的朋友们，表示热烈的欢迎。
On this splendid moonlit night, we gather together Shanghai located on the coast of eastern ocean.Let me,on behalf of the Chinese Government and people,extend a warm welcome to my friends who have come to take part in \"\'99 Fortune Global Forum, which is sponsored by Time Warner Group Inc.

located  表示比of  是更为贴切一些呢
确实没有想到要用完成时呢 we have come to .....

On this splendid moonlit night in mid autumn，we get together in shanghai of the beach of east ocean.I am on behalf of the Chinese Government and people
let me extend a warm welcome to the friends who attempt the  \'99 Fortune Global Forum, which is sponsored by Time Warner Group Inc.
  希望帮我指出错误。谢谢[s:9]




























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moonlit night
gather
located on the coast of ...的确大出我的意料之外。
who have  come to take part in...前来参加，我只说了前来，没说参加，失职。。。

在这月明中秋的良宵，我们在东海之滨的上海欢聚一堂，我代表中国政府和人民，向前来参加时代华纳集团举办的“\'99《财富》全球论坛”活动的朋友们，表示热烈的欢迎。

on this splendid moonlight in mid autumn,we gather round shanghai of the beach of east ocean, i am on behalf of the chinese government and people to extend a warm welcome to the friends of present here coming to \'99 Fortune Global Forum, which is sponsored by Time Warner Group Inc.