张剑 曾鸣《考研英语最后冲刺8套题》答疑专贴（已经开始作文修改了）

楼主辛苦啦～～～

原帖由 找着找着 于 2008-12-22 12:04 发表
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Dear Li Feng
     I am now writing this letter to express my sincere thanks for you give me warmly received when I visited your school. I would like to you know how much last week at yo ...

Dear Li Feng,
I am now writing this letter to express my sincere thanks for you give me warmly received (修改为your warm reception) when I visited your school. I would like to you know (you to know) how much last week at your university mean to me (修改为：how much joyfulness of the experience at your university last week has been given to me). I not only enjoy the environment of your campus, but also the lovely students in your university.

I should be obliged if you will visit my university next week. I believe that you will interest (请查字典interest动词的用法，此处修改为：be interested) in this action (用词错误，修改为：activity). I look forward to seeing you next time.

I repeat my thanks again (与repeat重复，删去) for you warmly received. And I look forward to your early reply.

Yours sincerely
Li Ming

评析：
本文段落结构比较清晰，但文中词语运用和语法错误过多。真诚地提醒作者，如果每次写作文都是错误的运用词汇和语法，只能加深对于错误的记忆。请在平时的练习中遇到任何拿不准的用法都查查字典，这样的练习才真正有效！
评分：5分


So vivid and thought-provoking is this extraordinary picture that we are tempted to take another close look and we find in the first picture, (句式错误，去掉逗号，加上that) a government employee gives some money to a man who is too poor to survival (词性问题survive). The man is very happy and say “thanks” to the government employee. On the contrary, when a professor gives a book that teaches people how (疑问词加动词不定式做宾语to) plant apple. The man refuse (主谓一致refuses) to accept this gift. It can easily be seen that many people don’t know what is the utmost importance to became (不定式后面用原形become) rich.

Indeed, kowededge (knowledge) is most important to reducing poor (1.be important to do sth 或者be important to sth 2.“消除贫困”应为eliminate poverty
此处修改为：is most important to eliminate poverty或者is most important to poverty elimination). There are some reasons to explain this and following (词语运用错误，the followings) are the typical ones. The first reason is that money that others gives (主谓一致give) you can help you solve some difficults (difficulties) once in a while, but it (缺少谓语，加上will) not always have (do so). The second reason is that if you have technology, you can earn money by yourself. Therefore nothing is more important than to receive education. We can say “it is better to tell you how to catch fish than to give you fish”.

Accordingly it is imperative for us to take concerned measures. First and foremost the government should play positive role in support (supporting) job training programs. In addition, we should improve the awareness of people that it is of the utmost importance to receive education. The last but not the least it is essential that rules should be worked out to encourage technical personnel (to) teach poor people some knowledge that can help them finding job.

评析：
本文对图画寓意的理解正确，段落结构比较清晰，需注意短语搭配，主谓一致等问题。小作文出现的问题在大作文再次显现，说明写作考察的是基础语言知识的综合运用能力，没有牢固的基础知识，是无法写出优秀的作文的。请作者继续努力！
评分：7分


C

强悍!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

问一下，大家觉得这八套难吗？

Kfzhou八套题第八篇作文

The picture vividly shows that, a man is busy cutting pieces from other’s (others’) articles and pasting these pieces together. The man with the opinion of “yours is mine” finishes his article by this way and then labels this article (as) “my achievement”.

Obviously it is wrong to do so. However, this phenomenon is very popular among the (非特指，去掉the) scholars. It will do harm to our society in the long run. Among other things, the scholar will create no new ideas by this way. With the articles which have no new ideas (与前面重复，语言显得赘述，建议与上一句合并起来，加上连接成分as a result), our society can’t move on. Besides, it’s a social moral problem. Just thinking of your articles stolen by others in their articles, will you not be angry?

In my opinion, it is seriously wrong for them to do so. It is high time to take steps to control this situation. On one hand, our government may establish a few laws to punish the people who steal other’s achievement. On the other hand, we should educate young people not to do so. Only in this way will we be able to eliminate this phenomenon.

评析：
本文对图画的描述比较清晰，对寓意的把握也是正确的，段落结构方面做得不错，语言表达比较流畅，句式有变化，词语运用基本准确。
评分：13分


Notice
To all students and staff,
It is widely believed that, the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games is a complete success and gives us a perfect memory. In every field of Beijing Olympic Games, a lot of champions turned in superb performances to retain their titles. Although the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games is over, the spirt (spirit) of Olympic will encourage us to move on. Do you want to write it down about the 2008 Olympic Games? Our school journal is seeking contributions. All students and staff are warmly welcomed to send your articles by email before next Monday. The school journal email is schooljournal@gmail.com.
The Editorial Board

评析：
本文以一篇征稿启事，需要包含活动的组织者，稿件的主题、形式、字数限制、截稿日期、投稿途径等内容。这样的告示才能真正起到宣传的作用。而本文只涉及了以上部分内容，而且截稿日期也不详细，next Monday任何时候看都是next Monday。望作者下次写作时细心一些。
本文的语言表达比较流畅，用词和句式也较为不错。
评分：8分


C

太好了！！！！！！

谢谢啦！您辛苦了！！

谢谢楼主分享！

突然发现自己的作文真的很 中华哦

第三套 大作文
As is  vividly depicted in the cartoon,our society is going through a wave of junk messages ever witnessed.In the picture,a mobile is busy with receiving messages,which incur jealous of other three garbage cans,but it is ironic that these numerous messages are all of junk messages.
The picture has showed us a unwilling general agreement that junk messages increasingly is influencing our daily life.With rapid developing of communicative technology and increasingly universalizing of mobiles,people can copy with kinds of things conviniently.Scholars,policymakers and critics of all stripes have debated the social implication of these advances,but few have looked at the side effect:junk messages has come up as well,and thus the really value informations are buried in the sea of it.In addition, it is in the interest of enterprises to send trash messages for advertising their products--after all,the more junk message sent to user,the more potential interests there are.
Hence,junk message is not something that we can afford to lose or leave it at large.For one thing,the authorities concerned should not stay out away.Developing filter technology,block those junk messages,to save people\'s time spending on deleting them.For another thing,every citizens also can play a key role in insisting that well-meaning initiative transfer into better actions.


第二套 小作文
Dear Prof.Zhang,
I am writing this letter to invite you to judge a speech competetion,which is organized by the student\'s union.
The contest will be held at 7:00pm on Dec.30th at hall.This speech mainly focus on ecomonics crisis which has happened recently.
The purpose to held the speech contest is to spell students to reflect on the influence incurred by this economics crisis.As the prestige economy professor,your paticipation and judgement would be bring more value information and knowladge.
I would like to express my gratitude for your kind consideration of my request.I look forward to your reply.
                                                                                                                                     yours sincerely
                                                                                                                                             LiMing