Before entering the college, (1)I have known the college was not nearly as perfect as my inner college expected. I was thrown into deep sorrow, feeling I was abandoned by the world. For a long time, I was so depressed that I even started to doubt the significance of life. Just like a goat losing his way, I got dazed when thinking about my future. The remote distance between reality and ideal did make me sad. How pitiful I was!
It was (2)not until I began the life of the college that I got over disappointment.
However, later at college, I gradually came to realize that things seem to turn different from what I often expect. I can express myself to the fullest; I can acquire more freedom to act some beneficial things in my own way; I can make great progress with my exertion and perseverance. Above all, I'm full of confidence and enthusiasm.
The sky seems to be clear once again.
In order to run after the unexpected result, (3)we always forget to admire the beautiful scenery of the both sides of the road leading to front. (4)Each day that we wake is a new start, another chance. Why waste time on self-pity, sorrow and sloth? Life consists not in holding good cards, but in playing well those you hold. Now I am determined to believe in the saying that “He who laughs last laughs best”.
Yesterday is past.
Tomorrow is mysterious.
Only today is gifted.
Grasp it tightly and be ready to set off!
(山西大同大学2008级商贸英语2班 王小燕)
【评语】文章作者描述了自己的大学生活，主要描写了自己上大学前后的思想转变，逐渐由消极悲观的心态向积极进取、乐观向上的心态转变。描写比较到位，结构较完整，语言处理不是很恰当，需要更好地锤炼，个别地方更要特别注意一下。
【改进建议】(1) 建议改为was informed that my college would not be as good as expected；
(2) 应改为before, 更切合句意；
(3)建议改为we always forget to appreciate the beautiful sceneries on the either side of the road leading to the distance；
(4)应改为Each day when we wake up is a new start and another chance。 |
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