3) But many people feel puzzled about/perplexed at/over whelmed with...(the changes/situation), so this essay is intended to...(可用于批驳分析类议论文和知识性说明文)
4) Although lots of people follow the fashion/trend, I still set my heart on...(可用于理由陈述类议论文)
3.(关于毕业生就业)But many people feel perplexed at the orientation which is where the graduates go after graduation,so this essay is intended to give advices to some people and graduates who are puzzled about their future.
4.(追星族)Although lots of people follow the trend, I still set my heart on the rational consumption,a consumption with reasonable explaination,however,the consumption should under my economic capability also.
投河自尽的虾 发表于 2013-12-5 10:20
3.(关于毕业生就业)But many people feel perplexed at the orientation which is where the graduates g ...
3.(关于毕业生就业)But many people feel perplexed at the orientation which is【改为about】 where the graduates go after graduation,so this essay is intended to give advices to some people and【删掉】 graduates who are puzzled about their future.
4.(追星族)Although lots of people follow the trend, I still set my heart on the rational consumption,a consumption with reasonable explaination【可以不要,这部分和rational consumption重复了】,however,the consumption【这部分直接用一个which替代即可,其实你的转折意味不同,加强语气强调这个理性消费是在经济状态的允许之下这个事实可以在末尾加上】 should【添加not】 under my economic capability also.[beyond one's reach.]