肉垫 发表于 14-10-25 15:04
There is an old saying about persistence that goes, a journey of a thousand miles begins with single ...
文章立意和内容没有大的问题,相对而言较好地完成了题目规定的内容,需注意以下几个问题:
1.避免出现细节语法问题:【注意冠词的使用:如begins with(加a) single step】【注意保持主谓一致:如Everyone of us want(主语为everyone,改为wants) to】。
2.注意段落之间的衔接,尤其是第一段和第二段。
3.文章最后一段稍显单薄,需适当扩充内容。
4.注意句中第一个单词首字母大写。
作者的写作基础较好,需更加细心,并在文章收尾处多下一番功夫。在此基础之上,要想取得更好的成绩,可在文章句式方面进行努力,如“In the picture, a disabled boy is climbing the high mountain with his stick. he carries a heavy bag and seems tired out.”一句可以通过定语从句和独立主格结构(或非谓语动词作状语)来丰富句子的语法结构。
心宿二 发表于 14-10-25 15:06
As is vividly shown in the picture, a fairly long distance lies between a single-legged man who ...
文章存在以下几点问题:
1.语法问题:【注意区分谓语动词与非谓语动词,如…man who sweating a lot应改为“…man who is sweating…(用定语从句修饰man)”或“删除who(现在分词短语作后置定语,修饰man)”】。
2.表达不够地道,如single-legged应为one-legged。
3.注意词语的词性,如their terrible learn(learn为动词,不可修饰名词)credits,且此表述受汉语影响。
4.文章最后一段字数过少。须知,考研英语写作中,从段落内容的重要性而言,第二段>第三段>第一段,相应的,每段的字数多少也应如此。因此,作者应适当扩充第三段的内容。
yingxiaoluo 发表于 14-10-25 15:39
As is shown in the picture, a disable boy who is sweating is climbing the mountain. Although it ...
1.注意词语的词性:如【a disable(disable为动词,动词不可修饰名词,改为disabled) boy】
2.语法方面:【注意时态,如there is a caption which said(改为says) " willpower and perseverance".】【注意倒装句的语序,如not only determination do we need in all walks of life, but also a strong willpower is nothing to be defeated.应为“not only do we need determination in all walks of life, we also need strong willpower which can’t be defeated by anything.”(注意willpower不可数)】【句子缺少主语,如people who are perseverant are so powerful that (加they)can face any problems;又如only by doing so can make us (将make us改为we achieve)more success】【注意区分谓语动词与非谓语动词,如perseverant people never given(改为give)up】【注意介词后所跟成分,如They will insist on solve(改为solving,on为介词,后跟名词、代词或动名词) the problems】【注意情态动词后跟动词原形,如society should to(删除to) encourage citizens(加to) have more and more】等。
3.语言表述受汉语影响,如children are easy to be built characters。
catallena 发表于 14-10-25 18:27
The cartoon illustrates the situation of the climber who is sweating,what’s more,its title is ‘P ...
文章需注意以下几方面问题:
1.文章字数太少,只有121字,应适当扩充文章内容。
2.注意for example和such as的区别。
3.注意句子的完整性和表意清晰。如“The process not the road itself, but rather the perseverance people have as they encounter unexpected obstacles.”一句。
4.注意名词的单复数,如an important factors(前面用了不定冠词an,改为单数factor)。
冯信子 发表于 14-10-26 12:03
老湿,看我看我~~求批改,求打分~
As can be seen from the picture above, faced with a h ...
文章的立意和内容方面都没有大的问题,需注意以下几个方面:
1.注意同根词辨析,如sweated (改为sweaty)but steady
2. perseverance为抽象名词,一般情况下前面不加冠词。如…be overcomed with the (删除the)perseverance。
3.注意名词的单复数:如one of the most significant scientist(前面用one of,表明有很多个,改为scientists)。
4.注意文章的逻辑衔接,如【“Numerous cases exist to elaborate on this point: the story of Hawking…”一句中,冒号前面为numerous cases(很多例子),冒号后面为the story(一个特定的实例),前后不对等。可在两者之间加上诸如“但是下面的例子更具说服力”之类的过渡句,来衔接上下文意。】