【考研1号】“2014作文修改”——【第三期英语一“毅力与恒心”】

人云亦云的恩 发表于 14-10-24 21:47
What a thought-provking picture it is！A boy who stands on the bottom of a high mountain is climb ...

另外 ， 楼上那个写了284个 ， 会不会有点太多了...

刚看到，马上去写~

  Optimistically and positively, a handicapped boy is making every effort to climb a high mountain, which is even a great difficulty to others with no physical disability. It is will and perseverance that support him to accomplish this nearly incredible goal.
  The power of will and perseverance really can arouse the potential of our mankind. A good exemplification coming to my mind is Hawking, who suffers extremely serious disease so that the paralyzed muscle makes it impossible for him to control his body except for two fingers. But he became a world well-known physician, discovering black hole and completing the theory of big explosion of universe, which contributes a lot to astronomy and extend the abstract thinking of humankind. Without a strong will and persistent painstaking, definitely, it’s hard for him to live like average people, not to say to make so splendid-shining future.
  To sum it up, will and perseverance are indispensable qualities during our pursuing self-promotion. Thus it’s high time for us that we didn’t give up every tiny task in daily life. In turn, the small success will strengthen us to move toward a higher peak.

cnblue0730 发表于 14-10-25 09:02
Optimistically and positively, a handicapped boy is making every effort to climb a high mountain,  ...

早上在图书馆写完了，本来想中午回寝室再交的，总觉得心里惦记，还是跑回寝室交了吧·····求老师指导····

      I was profoundly moved by what I have seen in this picture which is so symbolic and instructive. As is apparently demonstrated in the drawing above, the boy seems to tired but never give up.Though educational and instructive it may seem at first glimpse, this cartoon does carry rather thought-provoking  implications .
      Obviously the drawing mirrors a current phenomenon about the ability of persistence and determination which is both inspiring and thought-provoking.There’re numerous reasons why it is and I would like to explore the most typically ones. For one thing, with the miraculous economic better-off brought about by more than thirty-year of reform and opening up, people tend to pay more attention to it. For another, there are increasing numbers people who are realizing persistence and determination is indispensable to us. Undoubtedly, the ability of persistence and determination to us is just like water to fish and wing to bird.
      From what has been discussed above, we may reasonably arrive at the conclusion that all of us should spare no pains to make people know the vital significance of persistence and determination. Only in this way can we lead a harmonious and happy life and make our world dimensional, colorful and vigorous.

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Davinci86 发表于 14-10-25 00:25
This picture showed that a young climber---carrying heavy bag,bearing angular shoes and using ...

你算算字数，都超过多少了？考试时候可能给你那么多时间来写吗？

笔为剑 发表于 14-10-25 11:23
你算算字数，都超过多少了？考试时候可能给你那么多时间来写吗？

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There is an old saying about persistence that goes, a journey of a thousand miles begins with single step. This is what the picture implies. In the picture, a disabled boy is climbing the high mountain with his stick. he carries a heavy bag and seems tired out. While in face of the rough mountain road, he never gives up.
Everyone of us want to realize our dreams and get success in our life. After all, it is very cheerful to image these things. But a great amount of people give up halfway when they meet difficulties.some of them even attribute their failure to the rough of goals without any persistence. But success and persistence is indivisible. A good case is Edison, who, failed 50 thousand times when he tried to invent battery, in face of so many times of failure, he held on consistently and persistently and finally succeed.
Therefore, no matter what we plan to do, we should have a down-to-earth attitude towards it，then try hard and keep on it. Only in this way can we reach our goals.
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