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【考研1号】“2014作文修改”——【第一期英语一“学位与能力”】

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Davinci86 发表于 14-10-11 19:31:00 来自手机设备或APP | 只看该作者
Davinci86 发表于 14-10-11 19:28
This is a funny picture.Mr.ZhuGe who was the master of the nation of Su,very famous person,was co ...

花了近3个小时。。。从四点多开始写的
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Moonriver 发表于 14-10-11 21:42:42 | 只看该作者
    The picture above shows an irony scene that the well-known talented Mr.Zhuge, who was specialized in almost every aspect from the universe to earth, went for a job at the job hunting market, only to find he was rejected directly. With the words ”Sorry, you neither have a diploma nor understand English”, the hunter seems serious, showing a “No” gesture to the surprised elite in front of him.
    What the scene reflects is obvious. It’s the certification that counts for the job hunters nowadays, not the ability and potential. This trend will bring loses to both employees and employers who are excellent without diplomas, just like Mr.Zhuge’s case.
    So far as I’m concerned, the personal ability should be regard as essential as the certification. Just care about the diploma won’t make sense. I would test one’s practical ability and estimate his potential while considering the schooling grades, were I the hunter. I truly demand all hunters take my advise. Only connect real ability with the diploma when making a decision about hiring, will the hunter receive more promising “Mr.Zhuge”.


真的自从六级考完似乎再也没有写过一篇…这都三四年了吧…T.T
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墨洛书 发表于 14-10-11 21:50:50 | 只看该作者
本帖最后由 墨洛书 于 14-10-12 00:35 编辑

写到后面已经不知道自己到底想说啥了给跪了_(:з」∠)_辛苦老师纠错QAQ我的作文一定看得很累(因为错太多。。。。。

      In this pecture, our very excellent and smart strategist who was the nation of SHU ,in the literature history of China.He came to the work market one
day, we may think he maybe wants get a job.a manager of a company told him,”I’m so sorry,MR ZhuGe.you have no diploma and you also don’t
understand English.”

      so,we all know MR ZhuGe must don’t get this job.In our society,diploma and English is very important,perhaps English is more important than diploma.But,in fact,they are whether the most important.Everyone who read the story by The Romance Of The Three Kingdoms,they all know how about the ability of MR ZhuGe.Like him,can’t get a job actually.Is it the lose with firm or with the society?Most of people get a job who used a degree,It’s maybe a right way,because degree can help they choose and find a person of ability as soon as possible.But,it’s not all.

      Take man as the foundation,no English,no degree,can’t explain how the ability of a man.Bill Gates have no degree too.this was not hinder him become very excellent.however,people mastered a foreign language no doubt to be helpful to promote to a higher office in now world.  
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PSY啾啾 发表于 14-10-12 08:24:08 来自手机设备或APP | 只看该作者
怎么看图???
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bujianxin 发表于 14-10-12 12:46:29 | 只看该作者
本帖最后由 bujianxin 于 14-10-13 01:23 编辑

    what will happen when Mr.zhuge,who is a superior intellect,to hunt job in this time?Are many company competing to employ him?No,no.Mr.zhuge  maybe can't find a ideal job because he hasnit diploma and can't speak English.
    Rescently,as show as the picture,diploma has more important staute when find job,in the meantime,English is a crutial skill due to globalization.Diploma and English are first step to find a good job.This pattern make somebody who has high work ability can't find job,and work for fabricate diploma will booming.
    It is not to say that this way is wrong.In deed diploma can became a index to measure ability,but it isn't absolute.Many people has high ability who has't diploma due to poverty or disease.So,campany that want to rescuit a real capable person should exploit a assessment technology suit position instead of campare diploma.
    So,the crutial question is coming:where is best place for learn how to use digger?!

最后一句不算总字数........
希望老师能帮助修改一下
在此先谢过了....
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追毛线团的猫 发表于 14-10-12 14:00:13 | 只看该作者
本帖最后由 追毛线团的猫 于 14-10-12 14:26 编辑

How could we evaluate standards in recruitment?

The drawing displays a very thought-provoking scene that if we put Mr.Zhuge,who well known as a wise man,before a employer nowadays to be examined,he would be rejected sarcastically,for the reason that he has neither diploma nor the mastery of English.

It reflects the actual trend in recruitment that most employer prefer some recognized standards such as diploma and capacity of English to screen employees. If a employee can not reach those standards,he could lose most job opportunities.

Why recognized standards are preferred?Because it costs quite a lot of time to test employees one by one,so quantitative standards which may reflect quality of employees play a role in picking out approriate ones in numerous resume more efficiently.By contrast,employers would miss some talented person with specialty.

To improve the situation,employers could set standards depend on actual demand and design interviews more effetively,and employees could take efforts to get achievements which can prove themselves and reach the standard avoiding the risk of erroneous judgement.


老师你看我有题目~我有分段~我写得好认真~
看到我看到我~

如果有幸能被批改就太高兴啦~

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yingxiaoluo 发表于 14-10-12 16:23:30 | 只看该作者
    As is shown in the picture, Zhuge Liang, an ancient Chinese who is famous for his wise is looking for a job. But the employer refuses him because not only doesn't he have any diploma, but also he can't speak English. How funny the picture draw for.

    In my opinion, there are too much unreasonable requirement of recruitment. First of all, employers favor people who good at English, who graduated famous school, who perfect for anything more than the job need. In addition, people looking for a job may be an average person who suitable for the job, but not so good at another thing. Last but not least, nowadays, this phenomenon causes many university graduates in China can not find a job to support their family, while a lot of position in the company are empty.

    As far as I am concerned, it is important to build up a better platform for hiring. On the one hand, employers should consider the job-hunters' capacity that the job real need, instead of the false one. On the other hand, job-hunters must improve their ability to adjust to the requirement of developing society. Only when we have done these, could we solve the issue as well as overcome the difficulty.


老师您好!感谢您百忙之中为我们批改作文。如果有空的话,麻烦帮我看一下这篇作文。我自己改过几次,有几个句子捋不清楚,感觉表达不太地道。希望能够得到老师的指点。
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爱丽丝菇凉 发表于 14-10-12 19:22:57 | 只看该作者
    As is shown above,in the job market stand an individual named ZhuGeliang, who was renowned for the extraordinary military background, just finding his job for living. However, the HR assistant refused him because he did not have any diploma and only speak Chinese more than other languages. Simple as the picture is, it does convey a profound implication.
    The picture tells us that the employers take a majority focus on job hunter's educational background and improve the recruit standard. So some person can not find an suitable job . No rose without a thorn. This phenomenon leads to an far-reaching influence in china education. A rising number of youth spend a great deal of their time on school work , in order to attend university. This really improve Chinese educational level. But how things going on after we get to college? Some of us abandon learning and weary of school life . What they really need is get an university degree more than other crucial things. Thus ,even they graduate from university and get the high degree ,they can not hunt a fine job immediately . There exists an conflict between knowledge and experience, which lead to the problem of employment.
    Obviously ,to address this problem, individuals ,organizations and government own to work together. For job seeker, one should not only achieve a more broadened horizon and encourage themselves to learn more, but also contribute themselves to social practice. And organizations, just like universities , colleges or schools, should focus on both theory and practice. As Frucklin Roosevelt says, ”We can not always build the future for our youth ,but we can build our youth for the future.” In no country, more than China, it has been said that is this phenomenon more obvious. We must maintain a sustained, healthy , rapid and coordinated economic development ant therefore people can get more opportunity to find an appropriate job.
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营云燕 发表于 14-10-12 22:41:30 来自手机设备或APP | 只看该作者
catallena 发表于 14-10-10 13:06
As the picture above shows,Mr.Zhuge,who has no certificates and has no knowledge of  English ,is dir ...

孩子,你比我写的好,但是不得不说单词拼写错误啊!而且词组使用不当,employee是被雇佣者,employer才是boss啊!现在,可以说at present或者nowadays。很抱歉,我不知道还有in present这种说法。被拒绝啊,应该是was吧?手机党,没有看完,可能我说的也是错的,不用介意哈,个人意见!很不错,加油!
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营云燕 发表于 14-10-12 22:46:22 来自手机设备或APP | 只看该作者
爱丽丝菇凉 发表于 14-10-12 19:22
As is shown above,in the job market stand an individual named ZhuGeliang, who was renowned for  ...

china education是中国式英语吗?我觉得应该用Chinese。写的好好,不像我。。
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