【英语作文】【造句+翻译比赛】（回帖者奖励20考元）【4月19日有更新】

I would like to travel to the day when I am old enough to see whether I have already content with my life or not.
我想穿越去我老去的那一天，去看看那时的我是否对自己的一生感到满足。

I’d like  the glorious age of Tang Dynasty , if so I needn't  to concern about the pressure of the means of livelihood ，as is known to all , during which time peoples' life was rather rich . In that condition I am able to quest for my senior needs rather than take account of the  pecuniary condition  when  it comes to make choices . Frankly speaking , it’s real-life that restricts human beings to exert their potential to the fullest .

when i was younger i was always confused .if i have second  life i will try my best to furnish my dream.

1032378055@qq.c 发表于 2013-5-17 19:22
I’d like  the glorious age of Tang Dynasty , if so I needn't  to concern about the pressure of the  ...

书写文章时不要用缩写，用need not ,（最近上作文课的时候老师教的，分享下O(∩_∩)O）

，as is known to all , during which time peoples' life was rather rich .这一句可以独立成句，不谈跟前面的话就组不成一句啦。

rather than take account o 这里 rather than后面应该是名词或者动名词
when  it comes to make choices  前面主语是I，这里的IT指代不明，不如继续用when i have to make ...

it’s real-life that restricts human beings to exert their potential to the fullest .强调句用得不太成功，real-life这个搭配应该不正确，你可以再修改一下下。

穿越的话确实是这样的说，穿到古代如果还是动乱年代，生活水平就很差，唐朝，保证生活必须的环境，这点还是很重要的说

云端儿ashly 发表于 2013-5-17 22:46
when i was younger i was always confused .if i have second  life i will try my best to furnish my dr ...

你可以通过使用一些连词来把句子连贯起来，你的前一句和后一句关系不明，你可以尝试着修改一下么

越修改，作文功夫越好哟！！

The worst effects arising from incident that  beyond your imagination and leave your deep impression .

云端儿ashly 发表于 2013-5-17 22:46
when i was younger i was always confused .if i have second  life i will try my best to furnish my dr ...

谢谢。when i was younger i was always confused how to funish my dream so i gave up.if i have second  life i will try my best to come ture.

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What do you think about patience and time?

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what's a tragety? to tell the truth,I don't konw more about it. in my opinion,I think if I failed to pass this entrance exam,I will lose everything,I don't know how can iI contnue my way before me in my life ,I think this is a tragedy.AND YOU? and us?

IF I have the second chance to live,how will Ido? I ask mfself many times,today Ido it again.first of all ,Iwill make a goal and a arrangement,then,I will go toward it.secondly,I will cherish the people i  love,because of them, I think my life makes sense.seldom did I say "i love you"to myfamily.IF i Hhave this chance, I will do everything I want to.