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投河自尽的虾 发表于 2013-11-14 09:03
洛杉矶通过对不同种族的青少年进行研究后发现，青少年的行为榜样一般都是他们所熟悉的，例如他们的 ...

感觉你第二段没有把intended meaining提炼出来，结尾段的自己的opinion也不太清晰·····所以额，分数不会太高，应该为9-11分档之类的

        The given picture shows us a strange and complicated construction:it seems like an enormous spider web but filling with all teenagers who are using their computers to connects with each other.Even they are so closed,they still don't wants to chat with their friends face to face,how absurd it is!
            This carton may vivdly reveal a serious social phenomenon in young people's daily life--excessively depends on the cyber world and can not gets themselves back to the reality.With all about this,two major consequences will happens :weaken people's physical immunity is the first;and human willl becomes more embrassed when they are talking with people,or getting timorous when they are dealing with a completely stranger.
            Everything has advantages and drawbacks,so does internrt.when the networks bring us so much convenience,it also caused a plenty of physcial and psychological damage to our lives.  Walking away gradually from the cyber world is a matter of great urgency for us right now.we should find a balance between this two sides,do some sports and traveling in our daily life to alleviating this jumpy appearance

投河自尽的虾 发表于 2013-11-14 09:03
洛杉矶通过对不同种族的青少年进行研究后发现，青少年的行为榜样一般都是他们所熟悉的，例如他们的 ...

第一段描述，你最后一句就不用写了·····因为那不是图上表现出来的

其次第二段，分析不不够简练！最好是一条一条的写清楚，陈述明白

最后你的意见，老实说你得换一下表述手法，你那样的表现手法，好像最后一句才是你的opinion，所以，赶紧照着例文练习怎么写，构思最重要！！其次是词语和句式。

分档：9-11分档

The given picture conveys a normal phenomenon in nowadays china which is children considers their parents as a burden,just like the cartoon depictd---four kids regards their own old father as a ball and kicking him far way form their own place.It is distressed, isn't it?But this does happens in recently china!
How could this be? Economic downturn and unemployment may affects this poorly,but the main reason about the  appearance is the moral deficiency,chasing their own interests become more crucial than take the responsibility for their parents,especially when chidren have their own kids,they will gets lots of stuff to deal with,including take care of the food and clothing,studying,physical or psychological demands.
While government emphasizes the old people supporting issue----The old man cannot provide for themselves and old people's psychological demands,for example----some  reasonable solution is,that regular old people's social security system,advertising the virtue of chinese,and I think things will gets better if we come together with one heart!

投河自尽的虾 发表于 2013-11-14 09:03
洛杉矶通过对不同种族的青少年进行研究后发现，青少年的行为榜样一般都是他们所熟悉的，例如他们的 ...

参考译文：

根据一份对洛杉矶各民族的青少年的调查结果， 那些角色模仿对象是父母、亲朋和家庭外的医生的青少年，与那些声称自己的角色模仿对象是体育明星、歌手、或者其他公众人物的青少年相比，自尊心更强，成绩更好，物质消耗也更低。

苹果爱桔子 发表于 2013-11-14 18:19
第一段描述，你最后一句就不用写了·····因为那不是图上表现出来的

其次第二段，分析不不够简练！ ...

太感谢了，原来是这样。一直不知道该怎么办，现在有方向了。。

一直在找，好东西，谢谢

苹果爱桔子 发表于 2013-11-14 18:25
参考译文：

根据一份对洛杉矶各民族的青少年的调查结果， 那些角色模仿对象是父母、亲朋和家庭外的医生 ...

我的作文被改到了 　我错了好多呢　我不知道动词什么时候加ｓ　不知道什么词能修饰什么词　不懂从句是什么的　我不知道我英语懂什么了。。今天去百度了下语法。。o(︶︿︶)o 唉　我好无知啊。。

投河自尽的虾 发表于 2013-11-15 11:02
我的作文被改到了  　我错了好多呢　我不知道动词什么时候加ｓ　不知道什么词能修饰什么词　不懂 ...

这个可以通过多练习改变的，不要灰心啦，被打击才有动力！！

语法如果觉得模糊了的话就卡看相关的资料，捡起来就行！

为保障公民的环境利益，顺应世界人权发展的潮流，有些国家已在宪法或专门的环境法中确立了公民环境权并进行较好的保护··141#
In order to guarantee citizen's environment benefit, complied with the world human rights‘ development  tidal current, some countries already have established the citizen environment power in the constitution or th especial environment law and carry on a better protection.

lwhglxs 发表于 2013-11-17 10:58
为保障公民的环境利益，顺应世界人权发展的潮流，有些国家已在宪法或专门的环境法中确立了公民环境权并进行 ...

参考答案：
Some nations have already enacted the rights of residents to public environment into law and are protecting that right complying with the trend of world human rights development.

11 18请翻译：
Around the same time, I noticed that those who part with 2,285 US dollars a night to stay in a diff-top room at the Post Ranch Inn（波斯特农庄酒店） in Big Sur(大苏尔), California, pay partly for the privilege of not having a TV in their rooms; the future of travel, I'm reliably told, lies in "black-hole resorts," which charge high prices precisely because you can't get online in their rooms.