【考研1号】“作文修改”活动——【第二期“”道德滑坡现象】

道德滑坡现象

Directions:

Study the following picturecarefully and write an essay. In  thisessay,  you should

1. describe the picture and interpret itsmeaning,

2. analyse the causes of the phenomenon, and

3. express your opinions about the problem.

You should write 160-200 words neatly onANSWER SHEET 2. (20points)

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      Nowadays, there seem to be a tendency of breaking moralities prevailing in our society. Just as the cartoon depicts, in the bus crowded with passengers, a “blind” person, who is actually healthy, is sitting on the seat which is provided for special populations, with an old man, a child and a pregnant woman aside and helpless.

      The progress of ethics is an indicator of the level of civilization in a society. Apparently, the situation in the picture above, to some extent, hinders this advance and may bring about a serious effect on our moral life. Such a moral degradation has been common in the modern life. Food businessmen can add illegal and toxic ingredients into food that we eat everyday in order to reduce the cost and gain more profits. Passersby no longer help the elder who falls on the way and waits someone to offer assistance, because they are afraid to be viewed as the accident makers. Were the trend to continue as it is, people would live under the shadow of deception and suspicion.

      It’s urgent for us to make efforts to bridge the ethical gap. First and foremost, morality-concerned curriculums should occur in the primary schools, which help children to cultivate conscience and goodness. In addition, those who are deaf to the ethics must be punished and accused in order to alarm people not to try to violate these holy regulations.

谢谢批改！

我又来了，还是期待老师的批改。

    The picture features that a young man who acts as a blind people sits at the seat which is prepared for the special group,among which are the elderly,pregnant women, children, and the like. There has been a heated discussion about the picture in the newspaper recently. The author’s real purpose is not the fact itself, but to lead us to find the hides behind the ice berg.

    The picture does reveal that lack of moral is not only harmful, but also damaging. The past decade has witnessed a huge development in economy, bringing some problems at the same time, with the above one is the foremost. What’s more, the public fail to attach due attention to the traditional moral value. Respecting the elderly and taking care of the young is our tradition virtues in our country. Unfortunately，some people neglect our traditional virtues , which is worse to our society.

    The situation being so serious, it is high time that we took effective measures to tackle this problem. In this issue, researchers, scholars, and experts are expected to work out up-to-date solution to moral lack. We can tack an education campaign to inform people the importance of traditional virtues. Only in reasonable, prosperous and healthy atmosphere can we hope to witness the ideal scene in which people can enjoy the life in a harmonious society.

重在参与。改正错误，继续努力

    At the given cartoon, there are four people; an old man, a pregnant woman and a little girl are standing in the bus while a young man with a sun glass on his face, pretending blind, is sitting on the seat comfortably.
    Apparently, such kind of situation are happening all the time nowadays, especially when the rush time is coming. Working-man has much higher pressure, much less sleeping hour, and much longer distance between workplace and home, so they naturally prefer having the seat, not sending it away, no matter who need it more actually. On the other side, some people have this sort of simple view that “who got the seat first, who have it, no change.”
    Personally, I hold this opinion that when we confront situation like that, it depends conditionally. If it is a woman who is carrying a baby, it definitely is necessary to let her rest. If it is an old person who only needs one station to stay on the bus, or if it is a kid who has the ability to stand steadily, I would agree that the workman don’t need to give the seat away. It is not only about the virtue, it has the fairness concerned as well.

求改文。
谢谢！
辛苦了！

govycm 发表于 2013-10-20 10:10
我又来了，还是期待老师的批改。

    The picture features that a young man who acts as a blin ...

你是听何凯文的课的吧，看你的这两篇文章都好有他的风格啊。

arthashao 发表于 2013-10-20 17:16
你是听何凯文的课的吧，看你的这两篇文章都好有他的风格啊。

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      In the above drawing,there are four passengers in the crowed bus.The "blind"man is sitting in his seat ,while the pregnant woman,the old man and the children are standing aside and helpless.
      This cartoon obviously reveals that individual morality is declining in more and more prosperous and modern society.There are three causes that led to this phenomenon.Firstly,people care about material life rather than spiritual life in the progress of modernization.What's more,there is a wrong world view-every man for himself the devil take the hindmest,in the society.Thirdly,in a way,the lack of morality is related with the government poor regulstion.
      As the low citizen morality may bring about a series of bad effects in our normal life,it's urgent to solve the problem.To start with,we must improve personal social responsibility.With the improvement of individual morality,people will be less selfish and more concerned about others.In addition,strengthening the government guidance is a important part in building resident morality.Through everyone's effort,I think this phenomenon will be less and less.
第一次写，可能很没有逻辑，还是贴上来了。

govycm 发表于 2013-10-20 17:31
这都被发现了。不过我感觉跟着他还可以。考场上至少还是有写的。我之前的作文可不会写的。你听的谁 ...

他的课和王江涛的课我都听了，

我觉得不写不知道，一写吓一跳
感觉背了10篇文章，好像别人写的文也就是那个样子啊
自己一写，天啊，各种不通顺，各种错误，各种表达乱用
改来改去，改来改去，也只能改个自己看得见的错误
所以，互相改文，我觉得太有必要了